English 10 Essay Revision Checklist 1. Heading and Title: Look at the essay packet you received and be sure the first page of your essay has the correct heading and title. If these items are not on your draft, write them down now so you don't forget.
2. Quotes and Citations: Underline the four quotes in your essay.
Are all four quotes introduced with your own words? Does each have a proper citation?
ex. As the narrator explains, "your quote from the story or poem" (Rabe 10).
If you need to make corrections, do so now on the draft.
3.Transitions: Circle the first word in every sentence.
If you see no transitions, use the handout and add some. In addition, be sure that your sentences do not start with the same words. Make any corrections now.
Revise the following sentence beginners to eliminate them:
This (or other demonstrative pronouns: that, those, these)...
This quote explains...
If the following appear in too many sentences, revise them:
In the story "The Leap" (or whatever story or poem)
Boll... (or whatever author)
any other repeated words
4. Examine uses of pronouns.
Eliminate all first person pronouns:"I" "me" "my" "mine" "myself"
Eliminate all second person pronouns: "you" "yours" "yourself"
Use: individuals, people, readers, etc.
Eliminate all uses of personal pronouns: "we", "us", "our"
Why? Excessive use of linking verbs leads to weak writing. Do not simply delete the verb or use a contraction to hide the verb. You may have to rearrange the sentence completely. Aim for no more than 2-3 per paragraph.
6. Circle contractions (don’t, can’t, shouldn’t, won't, etc.)
Why? Contractions do NOT belong in formal writing. Write out the full words.
7. Essay Length: Essays that are short typically suffer from a lack of thoroughly developed content, unacceptably brief introductions or conclusions, or a combination of all of these problems. Be sure to expand and explain everything. If a visual will help: a well-developed paragraph is approximately ½ to 2/3 of a page long. (Note: since we have only included two examples per paragraph for this first essay, 1/2 page is more realistic.)
8. Edit out lame, elementary words such as thing(s), very, a lot.
in place of "things" use a specific word, or "entity"/"entities" or "items"